Port Waikato Camp - A Moment in Time!

Writing Criteria:

• Your writing must be about ONE specific moment in time during camp.
• Make your writing come alive by including your senses.
• You need an engaging opening sentence that will hook your reader in.
• You must include AT LEAST ONE complex sentence anywhere in your writing.a
• Make sure you use the ‘show don’t tell’ technique for each of your senses.

Planning / Prewriting:

My chosen moment in time is: campout
See	Hear	Feel/ Touch	Smell	Taste
stem, fire, tents, fish, slimy eels, freshwater, water fall, slippery  mud, banana split,	burgers sizzling, water splashing,	cold water, slimy fish, greasy burgers, fresh mud,	burgers, fresh tree, delicious banana split,	burgers, yucky  mud, delicious banana split,
A simile or metaphor I will use: I was going so so fast on the mudslide I was like a race car.		My opening sentence: Look at all of that steem in the burning hot fire.

Craft your piece of writing below, using your planning/brainstorming (do not open a new document).

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Look at all of that steem in the warm  burning hot fire. We need more wood for the fire. Look at all those tunes. I think we have something on our creator cache It is a little fish Look a slimy eel.Do you see that freash freazing water. Later we went to the waterfall It was freezing cold. The water was splashing down the waterfall. when we got back we found a slippery mudslide I was going so so fast on the mudslide that I was as fast as a race car. It became dark so we light the fire and we got pan to roast the bergers. we put the burgers in the pan I could hear them sizzling so loud. When they were dune we put on some of the dressing on myn it was delicious and it was so greasy it almost slipped out of my hands. After the bergers we roasted some marshmallows my coat on fire. we thought  of making banana split  we pote some chocolate in them when we finished we wrapped it with tin foil but we didn't post it in a pan we put it by the ashes of the fire. When it was done we undid the tin foil then we eat it it was delishes. by Jacob, keating