For the past fure days the allstar group has been learning about matariki. We Had a book that miss drayson gave to us we had to read the first sentence and see if we could improve it he is some of my sentence. here
is some sentences.
Once there was a man called mitai who lived with his seven brothers who lived in a village called mucatiu mucatiu was a place that was by a river that shined bright like the sun.
There once was a little boy celled mitai who lived with his seven brothers they all lived in an anti gravity chamber matai and his seven brothers played flying tag in there. by Jacob Keating
we were trying to achieve our goal by using complexe stuff like because, until, as, then, while.
That Explains a lot in the first sentence. To add complexity you have to use the aaawwubbis words. My Star Is you used A lot of complexity and changed the first sentence up really well. My star is that you edit and make sure it makes sense.
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